(1.) We both agreed that my introduction paragraph was mostly general. It gave my reader the basic information about Alice in Wonderland. But my conclusion is not found. And i also did not introduce the idea of Alice for being delusional until the third paragraph when I should have introduced it in the second paragraph.
(2.) My thesis statement is not placed correctly in the introduction paragraph, you should find it in the third paragraph. I introduced the symptom of being schizophrenic but i didn't argue if Alice was schizophrenic.
(3.) I basically didn't have all my paragraphs in the order they should be in.
(1.) We both agreed that my introduction paragraph was mostly general. It gave my reader the basic information about Alice in Wonderland. But my conclusion is not found. And i also did not introduce the idea of Alice for being delusional until the third paragraph when I should have introduced it in the second paragraph.
ReplyDelete(2.) My thesis statement is not placed correctly in the introduction paragraph, you should find it in the third paragraph. I introduced the symptom of being schizophrenic but i didn't argue if Alice was schizophrenic.
(3.) I basically didn't have all my paragraphs in the order they should be in.